Dark Sploosh

This novel is the first in a series of four that I've planned, and also it's the first novel I've ever completed. This is the third draft, and it still ...

Chapter 8: Hail the Conquering Heroes The sky was green that night, a dark emerald that twinkled with the spirits of far off flames and invigorated the entire village. Oburos ...

King of Babylon By Dark Sploosh Chapter 7: Fallen Jinn burst through the door, sending it flying off its hinges. Daylight seared his eyes for but a second, and then ...

King of Babylon by Dark Sploosh Chapter 6: Three Devils “Go,” Jinn uttered. He turned me around with one massive arm and nudged me towards the stairs. Shanzi and Anna ...

So here I am, checking this out like I promised. Starting with chapter one, I can see a bit of a familiar story here. Two sisters who both like some ...

Hello Astrid. I took a look at this like you asked, but to be honest it's nearly impossible for me to give an honest opinion on it. I've never even ...

Where do we start? You have a good first person viewpoint here. It sounds like a teenage girl should without becoming unlikeable, and flowed well enough that I didn't find ...

Chapter 4: Crunch The phone clicked dead. Nicholas stared at it in stunned silence, unable to believe what had just happened. If that guy was telling the truth… if that ...

Hey, giving your story a look like you asked, since you were so kind to give mine a look. Now then, there's good and bad in this first chapter. The ...

Chapter 3: Females Nicholas couldn’t figure out if the stare she gave him was confused or not, since she had been staring for all of the half-hour he had known ...

Chapter 2: Cops The officer came plodding down the stairs a few minutes later, defeat upon his reddened face. “What’s wrong?” Nicholas asked, trying to restrain his smile. The cop’s ...

Author's Note: I put up the first two chapters of the first draft months ago, and while people wanted to read the rest, I found myself too busy rewriting the ...

I find myself wishing this from time to time. Whenever life feels too easy or boring, I wish I lived in a time that had more struggle in it. Where ...

Hello again, Wolf. Taking a look at this fantasy piece, as a fragment I would say it's good overall. By it's nature it's confusing because I have no idea who ...

Wolf, I'm very impressed. Although I have to be honest and say the subject matter is of little interest to me personally, I'm struck by how clean your writing is. ...